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名师揭秘:教你如何写出高分SAT作文
时间:2011/7/28

  The College Board said, the reason so few students won top marks on the writing section is that so few - less than one percent - got sixes from both readers, for that perfect 12----NY Times ,Nov. 29th, 2009 纽约时报的这个评价,貌似给很多考生头上都泼了一桶冷水。全美国不到百分之一的满分率让是让以拿满分为目标的中国学生很难接受的。但是从另一个角度思考一下,你会发现,其实再合理不过了。在上千万的高考(微博)学生中,有多少人又能从阅卷老师手中拿到语文作文的满分呢?所以,如果可以拿到10分,已经是给很力了。

  难拿,不代表拿不到。而中国学生总要为此而奋斗一番,把那看似不可能的,变成可能。下面我们就来看看怎样可以达到阅卷老师满分的标准:

  

 


  阅卷老师满分的标准

  上面这个图标是我总结出的官方指南的评分标准,主要是从总体,内容,结构,语言和语法几个方面评判。内容,语法和语言尤为重要。

  这次我们主要来看在内容上如何突破:6分,5分和4分的作文都要求有critical thinking。这个是美国人思想的核心,也是整个SAT考试的精髓。所谓的“批判性思维”实际上就是‘摔倒-爬起来-成长’的过程。也就是说在文章中一定要体现出如何在所犯的错误中吸取到养分,并且利用学到的东西改变自己的生命。接下来我们拿一篇满分作文来分析一下:

  Without our past, our future would be a tortuous path leading to nowhere. In order to move up the ladder of success and achievement we must come to terms with our past and integrate it into our future. Even if in the past we made mistakes, this will only make wiser people out of us and guide us to where we are supposed to be。

  This past year, I was auditioning for the fall play, “Cat on a Hot Tin Roof。” To my detriment I thought it would be a good idea to watch the movie in order to prepare. For two hours I studied Elizabeth Taylor‘s mannerisms, attitude, and diction, hoping I could mimic her performance. I auditioned for the part of “Maggie” feeling perfectly confident in my portrayal of Elizabeth Taylor, however, I was unaware that my director saw exactly what I had been thinking. Unfortunately, I didn’t get the part, and my director told me that he needed to see “Maggie” from my perspective, not Elizabeth Taylor‘s。

  I learned from this experience, and promised myself I would not try to imitate another actress, in order to create my character. Persevering, I was anxious to audition for the winter play just two months later. The play was Neil Simon’s “Rumors,” and would get the opportunity to play “Chris,” a sarcastic yet witty role, which would be my final performance in high school. In order to develop my character, I planned out her life just as I thought it should be, gave her the voice I thought was right, and the rest of her character unfolded beautifully from there. My director told me after the first show that “Rumors” was the best work he‘d ever seen from me, and that he was amazed at how I’d developed such a believable character. Thinking back to my first audition I was grateful for that chance I had to learn and to grow, because without that mistake I might have tried to base “Chris” off of someone I‘d known or something I’d seen instead of becoming my own character. I utilized the memory of the Elizabeth Taylor debacle to improve my approach to acting and gave the best performance of my life so far。

  在上面这篇文章里(OG 6分)我们可以很清楚的看出作者犯了一个错误:To my detriment I thought it would be a good idea to watch the movie in order to prepare. For two hours I studied Elizabeth Taylor‘s mannerisms, attitude, and diction, hoping I could mimic her performance。她以为只要能够维妙维肖的模仿伊丽莎白 泰勒就可以得到那个脚色,出乎意料的是,导演竟然看穿了她,批评了她。最重要的是给了她一个很好意见:要演出自己的“Maggie”而不是泰勒的。

  第二段转过来,作者好好吸取了失败的教训,在“finalperformance”中按照自己理解的方式去揣摩角色,给她赋予了新的“生命”( In order to develop my character, I planned out her life just as I thought it should be, gave her the voice I thought was right, and the rest of her character unfolded beautifully from there。) 用作者的话说这个角色就慢慢地展现在她面前。而最终的结果,可想而知,作者得到了前所未有的好评: My director told me after the first show that “Rumors” was the best work he’d ever seen from me, and that he was amazed at how I‘d developed such a believable character。本来故事到这里应该结束了,可是作者继续升华,感谢自己之前犯下的错误,因为没有那个错误,就没有最终的成功。

  其实无论是在《Spider man》,《Iron man》还是《Super man 》中我们都可以清楚看到这条线。主人公一定要先犯错误,而犯下的错误一定不是致命的。因为犯错使他们谦卑,重新看清自己,然后在最后的最关键的的时刻取得了胜利。“人生最大的敌人不是别人,而是自己。要不断地挑战自己,战胜自己”这是美国人的精神和文化。200多年来美国人就是在不断的“犯错-改正-进步-再犯错-再改正-再进步。。。”中走到今天的。没有了这个,就失去了地道的美国味儿。SAT的文章要想得到满分,就要让阅卷老师都喜欢甚至“爱”你的作品。“入乡随俗”“投其所好”是必须的。既然知道了他们喜欢“吃”什么!就请你给他们“喂”什么吧!

 

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